here we sit in coffee shops and bars
wondering anxiously before the masses
order from the crowd: grande latte soy less
for me my friend. i have heard the stories
about the estrogen that’s running rampant
killing off mens ambition; men turned boys
the fall of the irreparable hearts
who’s “once upon a time’s” inspired in us
greatness, now hides behind the tired men’s faces
limping along with absent minds; yearning
for days in which the young were great and proud
but now we live our lives this sadder way
a lowercased and banal life; sadly watching
clocks for the moments that we free our self’s
and settle in the comforts of our mess,
looking for our heroes, but we are blind.
Very much enjoyed your work here. The structure subtlely supports the piece without shouting at you and allows the words and ideas to shine. Nice acephalous line right out of the gate! Glad to have found your work.
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thank you! I’m glad you caught the subtler things I put in here! Check out my newest poem if you want to see where I brandish a bit more, and make the meter work in interesting ways.
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